I'm thinking each quatrain's 3rd line is best, but you said you were particularly proud of one line, so my guess is Pentameterless Summer fell to Fall, because of the word-play and the grammatical structure.
But you should also be proud of the 3-stone loss. Even if you help a pet rock to roll over and play dead, it still deserves petting and praise for being a gneiss rock.
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Date: 2020-10-21 04:58 pm (UTC)But you should also be proud of the 3-stone loss. Even if you help a pet rock to roll over and play dead, it still deserves petting and praise for being a gneiss rock.